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@@ -19,8 +19,8 @@ m4_caption({{{{{August 24, 2025}}}}})
 ![The Focobon group at dawn](../img/24-0648-focobon.jpg)
 
 m4_caption({{{{{
-Forgive me if this photo is the same at the last one of the previous day,
-but it is one of my favorite. It is also quite fascinating how the light
+This photo is the same at the last one of the previous day,
+but it is one of my best shots. It is also quite fascinating how the light
 at dawn mixes up all the colors compared to previous day's picture.
 }}}}})
 
@@ -30,16 +30,16 @@ first checkpoint is the
 (1918 meters on sea level) which is unfortunately a bit farther away than
 it would have been if we slept in Fuciade.
 
-It takes us about one hour to reach the Pass. On the way we saw a cow
+It takes us about one hour to reach the pass. On the way we saw a cow
 breastfeeding her calf, which was cute. We cross the main road on the pass,
 and from here we have to walk up on grassy slopes and ski paths. The
 signs point to a path that is not the one we planned, but the two tracks
 join shortly afterwards. The ski paths are extremely steep, but wide,
 so we can easily zig-zag all the way up.
 
-At 10:30 we reach the *Pale di Gargol* (2218m), a plan that I am not sure
-why deserves a name. Perhaps the name refers to the whole area which I
-guess could be described as a rocky meadow.
+At 10:30 we reach the *Pale di Gargol* (2218m), a plane that I am not
+sure why deserves a name. Perhaps the name refers to the whole area
+which I guess could be described as a rocky meadow.
 
 ![The rocky meadow](../img/24-1027-pale-di-gargol.jpg)
 
@@ -54,10 +54,10 @@ feet of a mountain range.
 }}}}})
 
 Once again, the landscape has changed to show us something completely
-different from that we have seen in this trip so far. The continuous
-shift from rocks, to forest, to grass, to yet other types of rock and
-any combination of those features is in my opinion one of the most
-fascinating aspects of Alta Via 2.
+different from that we have seen so far. The constant shifting from rocks,
+to forest, to grass, to yet other types of rock and any combination of
+those features is in my opinion one of the most fascinating aspects of
+Alta Via 2.
 
 ![Walking down to Passo Valles](../img/24-1129-panorama.jpg)
 
@@ -68,15 +68,15 @@ The trail continues almost flat in this unusual scenery until we
 descend to [Passo Valles](https://it.wikipedia.org/wiki/Passo_Valles) (2032m)
 at around 11:50. We are now entering the fascinating section of
 the *Pale di San Martino*, also known in English as the
-[Pala group](https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Pala_group), of.which
-the Mulaz and the Focobon group are the northernmost peaks.
+[Pala group](https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Pala_group), of which
+the Mulaz and the Focobón group are the northernmost peaks.
 
 But first we need a break. We stop at a bar on the pass for a coffee
 and a slice of strüdel.
 
 ## Veneggia, Venegiotta and Pass dei Fochet
 
-We leave the bar at 12:20, and in half an hour we reach Forcella
+We leave the pass at 12:20, and in half an hour we reach Forcella
 Veneggia (2217m). The view opens up to the wild valley in the south.
 
 ![The view from Forcella Veneggia](../img/24-1252-forcella-veneggia.jpg)
@@ -85,7 +85,7 @@ m4_caption({{{{{The view from Forcella Veneggia.}}}}})
 
 So far, the day has not been particularly challenging. Later on
 we'll have to pass some difficult sections, but for now we continue
-on some easy, if tight, trails.
+on some easy, if narrow, trails.
 
 Despite the beauty of the place, we don't meet many other hikers.
 In fact, I think we saw more marmots than people in this part of
@@ -107,7 +107,7 @@ The landscape changes once again. We are now walking on rocks and gravel.
 We walk down a scree to around 2175m, before starting to climb up again.
 It's cold and cloudy, and this part of the trail is a fair bit more
 difficult than the previous. Nothing particularly hard or dangerous,
-but we have to pay a bit more attention where we put our feet.
+but we have to pay more attention to where we put our feet.
 
 The trail abruptly becomes extremely steep, and very demanding on my
 muscles, which so far had been enjoying a more relaxing day.
@@ -118,18 +118,19 @@ m4_caption({{{{{
 Some steel ropes help make the climb to Rifugio Mulaz less dangerous.
 }}}}})
 
-We reach Rifugio Mulaz (2570m) at 16:40, after a little more than
-8 hours from when we left Flora Alpina. Somehow, both these places
-are in the territory of [Falcade](https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Falcade).
+We reach Rifugio Mulaz (2570m) at 16:40, after a little more
+than 8 hours from when we left Flora Alpina. Somehow, despite the
+long walk between them, both these places are in the territory of
+[Falcade](https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Falcade).
 
 ![Reaching Rifugio Mulaz](../img/24-1638-mulaz.jpg)
 
 m4_caption(Reaching Rifugio Mulaz)
 
-From this hut, the only landscape you can see, in any direction, is
-naked rock. There is a tiny window from where you can see a valley,
-but the sight is cut out and the only visible thing is more rocks.
-Definitely fascinating, although personally prefer more varied landscapes.
+From this hut, the only landscape you can see, in any direction, is naked
+rock. There is a tiny window from where you can see a valley, but the
+sight is cut out and the only visible thing is more rocks.  Definitely
+fascinating, although I personally prefer more varied landscapes.
 
 I'll add a picture on the next day's page, the early morning light
 was much better.