Proofread days 5 and 6

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diff --git a/src/av2/day5/day5.m4 b/src/av2/day5/day5.m4
index 97484fb..99c3892 100644
--- a/src/av2/day5/day5.m4
+++ b/src/av2/day5/day5.m4
@@ -19,8 +19,8 @@ m4_caption({{{{{August 24, 2025}}}}})
 ![The Focobon group at dawn](../img/24-0648-focobon.jpg)
 
 m4_caption({{{{{
-Forgive me if this photo is the same at the last one of the previous day,
-but it is one of my favorite. It is also quite fascinating how the light
+This photo is the same at the last one of the previous day,
+but it is one of my best shots. It is also quite fascinating how the light
 at dawn mixes up all the colors compared to previous day's picture.
 }}}}})
 
@@ -30,16 +30,16 @@ first checkpoint is the
 (1918 meters on sea level) which is unfortunately a bit farther away than
 it would have been if we slept in Fuciade.
 
-It takes us about one hour to reach the Pass. On the way we saw a cow
+It takes us about one hour to reach the pass. On the way we saw a cow
 breastfeeding her calf, which was cute. We cross the main road on the pass,
 and from here we have to walk up on grassy slopes and ski paths. The
 signs point to a path that is not the one we planned, but the two tracks
 join shortly afterwards. The ski paths are extremely steep, but wide,
 so we can easily zig-zag all the way up.
 
-At 10:30 we reach the *Pale di Gargol* (2218m), a plan that I am not sure
-why deserves a name. Perhaps the name refers to the whole area which I
-guess could be described as a rocky meadow.
+At 10:30 we reach the *Pale di Gargol* (2218m), a plane that I am not
+sure why deserves a name. Perhaps the name refers to the whole area
+which I guess could be described as a rocky meadow.
 
 ![The rocky meadow](../img/24-1027-pale-di-gargol.jpg)
 
@@ -54,10 +54,10 @@ feet of a mountain range.
 }}}}})
 
 Once again, the landscape has changed to show us something completely
-different from that we have seen in this trip so far. The continuous
-shift from rocks, to forest, to grass, to yet other types of rock and
-any combination of those features is in my opinion one of the most
-fascinating aspects of Alta Via 2.
+different from that we have seen so far. The constant shifting from rocks,
+to forest, to grass, to yet other types of rock and any combination of
+those features is in my opinion one of the most fascinating aspects of
+Alta Via 2.
 
 ![Walking down to Passo Valles](../img/24-1129-panorama.jpg)
 
@@ -68,15 +68,15 @@ The trail continues almost flat in this unusual scenery until we
 descend to [Passo Valles](https://it.wikipedia.org/wiki/Passo_Valles) (2032m)
 at around 11:50. We are now entering the fascinating section of
 the *Pale di San Martino*, also known in English as the
-[Pala group](https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Pala_group), of.which
-the Mulaz and the Focobon group are the northernmost peaks.
+[Pala group](https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Pala_group), of which
+the Mulaz and the Focobón group are the northernmost peaks.
 
 But first we need a break. We stop at a bar on the pass for a coffee
 and a slice of strüdel.
 
 ## Veneggia, Venegiotta and Pass dei Fochet
 
-We leave the bar at 12:20, and in half an hour we reach Forcella
+We leave the pass at 12:20, and in half an hour we reach Forcella
 Veneggia (2217m). The view opens up to the wild valley in the south.
 
 ![The view from Forcella Veneggia](../img/24-1252-forcella-veneggia.jpg)
@@ -85,7 +85,7 @@ m4_caption({{{{{The view from Forcella Veneggia.}}}}})
 
 So far, the day has not been particularly challenging. Later on
 we'll have to pass some difficult sections, but for now we continue
-on some easy, if tight, trails.
+on some easy, if narrow, trails.
 
 Despite the beauty of the place, we don't meet many other hikers.
 In fact, I think we saw more marmots than people in this part of
@@ -107,7 +107,7 @@ The landscape changes once again. We are now walking on rocks and gravel.
 We walk down a scree to around 2175m, before starting to climb up again.
 It's cold and cloudy, and this part of the trail is a fair bit more
 difficult than the previous. Nothing particularly hard or dangerous,
-but we have to pay a bit more attention where we put our feet.
+but we have to pay more attention to where we put our feet.
 
 The trail abruptly becomes extremely steep, and very demanding on my
 muscles, which so far had been enjoying a more relaxing day.
@@ -118,18 +118,19 @@ m4_caption({{{{{
 Some steel ropes help make the climb to Rifugio Mulaz less dangerous.
 }}}}})
 
-We reach Rifugio Mulaz (2570m) at 16:40, after a little more than
-8 hours from when we left Flora Alpina. Somehow, both these places
-are in the territory of [Falcade](https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Falcade).
+We reach Rifugio Mulaz (2570m) at 16:40, after a little more
+than 8 hours from when we left Flora Alpina. Somehow, despite the
+long walk between them, both these places are in the territory of
+[Falcade](https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Falcade).
 
 ![Reaching Rifugio Mulaz](../img/24-1638-mulaz.jpg)
 
 m4_caption(Reaching Rifugio Mulaz)
 
-From this hut, the only landscape you can see, in any direction, is
-naked rock. There is a tiny window from where you can see a valley,
-but the sight is cut out and the only visible thing is more rocks.
-Definitely fascinating, although personally prefer more varied landscapes.
+From this hut, the only landscape you can see, in any direction, is naked
+rock. There is a tiny window from where you can see a valley, but the
+sight is cut out and the only visible thing is more rocks.  Definitely
+fascinating, although I personally prefer more varied landscapes.
 
 I'll add a picture on the next day's page, the early morning light
 was much better.
diff --git a/src/av2/day6/day6.m4 b/src/av2/day6/day6.m4
index 9ec5bc2..c4137bd 100644
--- a/src/av2/day6/day6.m4
+++ b/src/av2/day6/day6.m4
@@ -17,10 +17,10 @@ m4_caption({{{{{August 25, 2025}}}}})
 ## The starry night
 
 During the night I woke up and managed to catch a glimpse of a wonderful
-starry night, the likes of which I have never seen before.
+starry night, the likes of which I had never seen before.
 
 If you live in a place with a lot of light pollution, like every medium
-to large city nowadays, seeing *a few* stars may already be an unusual
+to large city in the World, seeing *a few* stars may already be an unusual
 experience.  At the moment I live in a fairly small city, and we literally
 never see stars over here. We are lucky if we see Venus once in a while.
 
@@ -29,8 +29,9 @@ used to seeing skies full of stars at night. But this time, at 2500
 metres above sea level, in the middle of literally nowhere, the sky was
 soething else.
 
-I did not manage to take a good picture, sorry. I did not feel like going
-out in the freezing cold.
+I did not manage to take a good picture, sorry. I did not feel like
+going out in the freezing cold, and my phone's camera is probably not
+good enough anyway.
 
 ## The Farangole pass
 
@@ -41,21 +42,21 @@ the sunset.
 ![The morning sunset](../img/25-0707-sunset.jpg)
 
 m4_caption({{{{{
-Rifugio Mulaz is closely surrounded by high mountains.  This is the only
-spot where you could see something in the distance.  The sun rises from
-the peaks on the left of this picture, only to hide away behind those
-on the right shortly afterwards.
+Rifugio Mulaz is closely surrounded by high mountains.  This is the
+only spot where you could see something in the distance.  This time
+of the year, the sun rises from the peaks on the left of this picture,
+only to hide away behind those on the right a few minutes later.
 }}}}})
 
 It's a beautiful day, if only a bit cold. This time we get up earlier than
 usual and we are ready to leave at 7:15. The main challenge of the day
-is going to be the *passo delle Farangole* (2932 meters on sea level),
+is going to be the *Passo delle Farangole* (2932 meters on sea level),
 a high mountain pass not far from the hut. Our guide book even suggests
-a possible alternative route for less confident hikers, but we believed
-it to be within our capabilities.
+a possible alternative route for less confident hikers, but we deemed
+it within our capabilities.
 
 After steep, but short, climb to *Forcella Margherita* (2655m) we reach a
-section of the trail that would not be particularly challenging, it was
+section of the trail that would not be particularly challenging, if
 not for the fact that the track is not well marked.
 
 ![The trail after Forcella Margherita](../img/25-0740-after-forcella-margherita.jpg)
@@ -70,25 +71,25 @@ by backtracking their steps when they realized they were out of the
 trail. We do the same a couple of times.
 
 We soon reach the start of the equipped trail that leads to the pass,
-but I am not convinced and I decide to try climbing up the scree next
+but it looks sketchy, so I decide to try climbing up the scree next to
 it. This was probably a mistake, so we soon turn left and attach our
 trusty ropes to the steel supports.
 
-![Me, climbing up to the Farangole pass](../img/25-0830-up-to-farangole-pass.jpg)
+![Me, climbing up to the Farangole Pass](../img/25-0830-up-to-farangole-pass.jpg)
 
-m4_caption(Climbing up to the Farangole pass.)
+m4_caption(Climbing up to the Farangole Pass.)
 
 The track is very steep, and at times
 [exposed](https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Exposure_%28heights%29), but the
 steel ropes and the other supporting material is in a good state.
-Overall, this famous Farangole pass is easier than we expected.
+Overall, this famous Farangole Pass is easier than we expected.
 
 ![My dad climbing down from the Farangole pass](../img/25-0851-down-from-farangole.jpg)
 
 m4_caption({{{{{
 And down we go. The steel ladder looks like it ends in the void,
 but actually there is an extra steel beam protruding from the
-rock, and after that there only a 60cm drop.
+rock, and after that there is only a 60cm drop.
 }}}}})
 
 After clearing the pass at around 9:00, we feel satisfied and proud of
@@ -96,7 +97,7 @@ ourselves. My knee does not even hurt anymore.
 
 Little did we now that the truly difficult part is the Farangole *trail*,
 which we'll have to go through later this morning.  But for now, in our
-blisfful ignorance, we enjoy the beautiful weather and we take plenty
+blissful ignorance, we enjoy the beautiful weather and we take plenty
 of pictures as we walk down from the pass.
 
 ![North view, towards the pass](../img/25-0910-blue-sky.jpg)
@@ -120,7 +121,7 @@ As the trail gets tight and very exposed, we realize that maybe
 proceed carefully, attaching our home-made harness when a steel rope
 is available. Unfortunately, most of the trail is on a narrow ledge
 surrounded by grass and soft soil, where no piece of supporting material
-can be fixed. At least it is not wet.
+can be fixed. At least it is not wet today.
 
 ![My dad walking on the Farangole trail](../img/25-1109-dad-farangole.jpg)
 
@@ -142,8 +143,8 @@ pictures than we did earlier.
 m4_caption({{{{{
 The view from the last part of the Farangole trail, towards
 the East. Soon we'll have to walk down to the dry bed of the
-river at the bottom center of this picture. On the left, you
-can see the tiny line that is the Farangle trail.
+river you can see at the bottom of this picture. The tiny line
+on the hill on the left is the Farangole trail.
 }}}}})
 
 At 12:30 we reach the bottom of *Valgrande* (*Pian dei Cantoni*, 2310m).
@@ -151,9 +152,9 @@ At 12:30 we reach the bottom of *Valgrande* (*Pian dei Cantoni*, 2310m).
 ## To Rifugio Rosetta and beyond
 
 The way up to Rifugio Rosetta is steep, but short. The previous
-part was not phisically demanding, but it was dangerous and
+part was not physically demanding, but it was dangerous and
 technically fairly challenging. I am relieved that now I can just
-let my leg bring me up, and I reach the hut at 13:05.
+let my legs bring me up, and I reach the hut at 13:05.
 
 ![Rifugio Rosetta](../img/25-1321-rosetta.jpg)